Saturday, September 15, 2012

The Box





Fifteen steps north from old man Barner's shed is an almost unseen path leading into the woods.  I never would have noticed it if I hadn't seen the X on the map.  Patting my pocket to make sure the map was still there, I stepped onto the path and followed it deeper through the trees.  Before he died, the old man told me about a box buried deep in the woods.  "Keep it safe and guard its secret," he whispered and then he was gone.  

Why me?  I was just someone who stopped by every month for the past five years to deliver his medicine.  But it was this last visit when he decided to show me the tattered map.  I could tell he didn't have much time left.  Muttering, sometimes incoherently, old man Barner told me the tale of the Vespars.  An ancient tribe who used to live in these woods and guarded the magic they found there.  I had a hard time believing what the old man was saying.  But when he became agitated at the thought of this mysterious box being discovered by just anyone walking through the woods, I promised I would recover it.

Dried leaves crunched beneath my shoes and sunlight filtered through the tightly woven trees as I counted out the paces until I came across the large bolder shown on the map.  Barner said the box was three feet down and the smell of rotting vegetation filled my nostrils as my shovel bit into the dirt.  I wasn't even sure why I was here.  It's not like I believed the old man's story.  It's not like I believed in ancient tribes and magic.  And then all I could hear was the sound of the shovel hitting something hard. Could old man Barner be telling the truth?

14 comments:

  1. Oh wow. This has to be pursued into a full-fledged story. You certainly do have a gift with word and story, Donna.

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    1. Awwww, shucks, ma'am...;~)...I try...

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  2. Ohhhhh this is good!... Very mysterious, I want to know more..... more please...lol.

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    1. Thanks, Diane...my gift is being able to daydream a story into reality...my curse is not having enough time to actually write the whole thing down...lol...

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  3. I love a story where a shovel bites into the dirt! Nice!

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    1. Hi Genevieve! Thank you for your kind words...funny thing is, right now even I don't know what's in that box! ;~)

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  4. This is fantastic, Donna - so well written and gripping - I totally want to know what's in that box!

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    1. Hi Susanna! I'm honored you liked today's post...I think I will work on making this a short story as I don't seem to have time for longer tales...;~)

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  5. Hi there Donna, thanks for stopping by my blog! Love this, by the way...quite intriguing!

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    1. Greetings and welcome to my blog! Thank you for your kind words...I try...;~)

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  6. Inside the box is a poem I wrote and buried for someone to find years later. Actually, I didn't put it in a box. It was sealed in plastic and was buried in Maine. Now, YOU go find it. And tell me what is in the box!

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    1. Hi Janet! I would LOVE to go look for that poem you buried...you KNOW Maine is where I want to retire...;~)
      As for what's in the box? You will be the first to know...right after I figure out what's in it myself! Lol...

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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  7. Donna,

    Thanks for stopping by today. I'm intrigued...we do get to learn what's in that box, don't we. Good post!

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    1. Hi Yolanda! I think I will try to make a short story out of this post so yes, you will learn what's in the box...just not right now...;~)

      Thanks for stopping by and come back any time!

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